The dialogue in this excerpt has its ups and downs. Some lines, like Lu Ye’s “I can also dissolve it,” sound natural, while others, like the villager’s explanation of cultivation realms, feel a bit like exposition dumps. The conversations between Jiang Lianshan and Jiang Qingge are heavy on explaining the political stakes, which is necessary but could be tighter. I do like Jiang Lingyue’s teasing tone; it lightens the mood. The writing is overall functional, but a bit more spark in the dialogue would help.