The mayor’s deference to Luo Yingxue implies she has geopolitical influence. But we haven’t seen any of her business or political operations. The story tells us she’s powerful, it doesn’t show us. That’s a classic flaw. The suitcases of cash are a visual shortcut, but I’d rather see a business meeting or a tense negotiation to back up the claims. Show, don’t tell, please.
Honestly, the only thing holding this back from being a top-tier fanfic is that the relationship with the alternate selves is too easy. He just inherits their power by fulfilling wishes. There is no struggle. He got four stars immediately. The system feels a bit like a "get out of jail free" card rather than an engine for conflict. I hope future selves are harder to please.
2 I wish the author gave more backstory on Zhuang Lingyun earlier. We’re three chapters in and I still don’t know why he’s so interested in a woman who just paid him off. Is he genuinely attracted? Does he know her from before? Or is he just bored?
Okay the transmigration reveal caught me off guard. I thought this was just a comedy wuxia, but the author threw in this "Little Sky Classmate" as a literal heavenly entity apologizing for summoning her? The absurdity of a six-year-old in shorts showing up while everyone's frozen in time is peak humor. Miao Yunyou's meltdown about losing her "fresh graduate status" hit way too close to home for modern readers. She's been stuck in ancient times for three years with no phone, no toilet, and now she's worried about resume gaps. That's the kind of relatable content I live for.