The story so far is a mixed bag of great emotional moments and clunky fantasy setup. I think the author is better at writing realistic human interactions than at crafting magical systems. The hospital scene, the taxi driver, the sister memories — those are gold. The God introduction feels like a generic isekai template. But Hinami herself is a strong character. She’s loving, self-sacrificial, and aware of her own limits. If the author can bring the same emotional depth to the other world scenes, this could be really good. For example, when she first sees her new house, she could feel a mix of gratitude and homesickness. The exchange diary could contain raw thoughts. I hope the author doesn’t forget that the heart of the story is Hinami’s love for her sister. That’s the hook. If the fantasy becomes an escape from that, it loses meaning.
the concept of "mecha act" restricting mecha use is interesting but never explored. why would a government that relies on mecha to fight aliens restrict them? is there internal rebellion? are mecha dangerous to civilians? that line about 1963 passing the mecha act raises so many questions that the story doesn't answer. feels like it was just flavor text in the timeline
The portrayal of the construction work details feels authentic. The mention of safety helmets, the long meeting, the foreman's power trip. It grounds the story in a blue-collar life. Many apocalypse novels start with office workers or students, but a construction worker protagonist brings a different perspective. He's used to physical labor, so the apocalypse isn't a total shock to his body. Also, his knowledge of tools and materials might be useful. The pot lid and steel bars are natural weapons for him. Nice touch.
Eld’s heterochromatic eyes being seen as cursed by some superstitious people is a nice worldbuilding detail. It adds a layer of social tension beyond just the family drama. I bet that prejudice will come up again later in his travels.
The rebirth might feel overdone in some novels, but here it’s used to give the protagonist knowledge and a goal. He’s not just redoing things perfectly; he’s gambling. That element of risk keeps me engaged.