The conflict with the Fire Armor Beasts is fine for a tutorial arc, but I hope it escalates soon. Killing one hundred beasts just for crystals could become tedious. Mix in some boss fights or puzzles to keep it fresh.
The amnesia is written really well here. “Complete amnesia was as agonizing as death, as helpless as a newborn.” That line hits. He doesn’t just forget the plot; he forgets everything. He even doubts his own name. The way he clings to the dream of the girl wiping his mouth is heartbreaking. It's his only anchor.
Wang Dali’s story is such a heartfelt side plot. Here’s this migrant worker who’s been grinding his whole life, barely sees his daughter, and suddenly his kid is in danger. His desperation when he calls his second uncle feeling for the child – I could feel that panic through the page. And Wu Yin just calmly calculates the birth time and says “look east to where there’s water.” It’s simple but effective. The payoff with the little girl in the well was very satisfying.
The attribute boost after the evolution was satisfying. +10 to all stats for Gu Chen as a Level 1 Summoner? That’s ridiculous. It makes the MC an outlier right away and gives hope that he won’t be a generic summoner who just stands in the back. I like when summoners get personal power too.
The "70 energy points" and "30 points per teleportation" is a great game-like resource management system. It gives the story a structure. Every chapter feels like a "mission" that Chen Jin is preparing for. He has a limited number of tries, so he has to be careful. This creates tension not just from the danger of the world, but from the risk of wasting his daily allowance. It’s a simple but effective way to keep the stakes high even when he’s not dying. 1
I really liked the bit about the mandarin ducks embroidered on the bed curtains. Luo Qingyu stares at them while Lin Yi is on top of her. It’s a small detail but it symbolizes the perfect marriage she’s supposed to have versus the ruined reality. The author could easily have skipped that, but it added a layer of poignancy to a very ugly scene. It’s moments like that which elevate the writing from pure shock to something a bit more thoughtful.