Can we talk about the writing style? It’s very descriptive and atmospheric, which I love for this kind of story. The way the author describes the pear blossoms under the moonlight or the sandalwood scent on Yun Yichu really sets a mood. But sometimes the descriptions get a little lengthy and slow down the action. It’s a minor complaint, but I’d like a tighter pace in some chapters. Still, the prose is enjoyable overall.
I'm a little worried about the pacing if every chapter is going to be Mo Yunxuan running commentary on other people's drama. The first foray into the Imperial City Guards was cut short by the street drama. I hope the story finds a good balance between this fun meta-comedy and the actual plot progression of him taking over his military command and dealing with his own political challenges. Otherwise, he's just a spectator in his own story.
1 I'm really curious about the world-building behind cultivation now. The elder mentions "Grandmasters" can resurrect the dead and perform incredible feats, but he can't himself. So there's a clear power hierarchy. But what I find frustrating is how inaccessible cultivation is for poor orphans. You need to join a wealthy household just to get basic techniques. That's a huge barrier that makes the kids' situation feel even more hopeless. Their only potential ticket out of this is Xiao Ya's mysterious talent.
The detail about the peace mark behind Yu Bai's ear is a nice visual. It works better than a floating window or something high-tech.
The pacing in the first few chapters is breakneck. He gets a system, gets skills, gets a mission, kills a beast, and gets a calamity skill all within a few pages. I’m not complaining, but I hope it doesn’t become a pattern where everything is handed to him. Slow down a bit, let us breathe.