The village setting is described well enough for a web novel. I can picture the earthen houses, the mud roads, the old willow tree. Peach Blossom Village feels like a real poor mountain community. And the stark contrast with Liu Dabiao's brick-and-tile house shows the class divide nicely. Good world-building for the setting.
2 I am genuinely excited about the secret realm sequence coming up. The stakes are high because Ling Yu only has a 30-40% chance of success even at perfection. That’s nervy. Most stories would guarantee success for the MC, but here it’s uncertain. It feels like a sports final: you’ve trained your whole life for one shot. And if he fails, he has to wait until the fifth realm. That decades-long penalty raises the tension. I’m sitting on edge hoping he succeeds.
I gotta say, the opening was a wild ride. That dream about the tiger with the old man in its mouth? Seriously creepy, and it hooked me right away. The way the MC wakes up gasping and just writes it off as a nonsense dream because he's an orphan is such a good, realistic touch. You can already tell the author is setting up something bigger with that master he claims not to have.