One complaint: the father’s dialogue feels repetitive. He just repeats “bastard” and “lost face” over and over. While that fits his character, a bit more variety in his insults would make the confrontation feel less one-note. But his anger is believable.
I'm slightly concerned about how the family will react to her sudden interest in Sheng Ze Xi. They know she was obsessed with Wen Zhiqing. They might think it's a rebound or a phase. Her mother might be suspicious. It could create a sub-plot of them trying to protect her from rushing into marriage. That would be interesting drama. I hope the author explores that tension without it becoming annoying.
The detail that he spent 13 hours a day practicing magic for two months straight - and only got 5 correct practices per day on average - really drives home how terrible his natural talent is. Most fanfics would gloss over that or make the protagonist secretly gifted. Here, he's genuinely bad at magic and has to brute force his way through with sheer stubbornness. That's more compelling to me than another "actually you're the chosen one" reveal.
The moment where Yi Qianqian smugly says "I don't like sour things" in response to being accused of jealousy is such a classic deflection. She's clearly jealous, but she'll never admit it. That's the core of their relationship: two people who refuse to show vulnerability.
Overall, I’m really enjoying the novel’s grounded, survival-focused approach to martial arts. The protagonist is relatable, the world is dangerous and mysterious, and the rules of the setting (difficulty of understanding manuals, need for physical strength) are clearly established. I’m invested in seeing whether Shi Feizhe can truly master the 《True Origin Sword Finger Formula》 and carve out a place for himself in this brutal Jianghu.
Jiang Yu's backstory with her ex-boyfriend and cousin is infuriating. They used her for money and then stole her space. I felt her anger when she slapped her own head calling herself a sucker. Revenge is justified.