I think the chapters could be longer. This feels like a chunk of a chapter, not a complete one. If it were a full chapter, I’d expect some exploration or level up after the fight. But as a serialization, it’s fine.
The transition from peaceful reading to crisis is handled well. The dogs barking, Jiang Li’s figure in moonlight, the white bandage—basic but effective suspense. My heart rate jumped when I saw the injury described.
I have mixed feelings about Bei Weiwei. On one hand, she’s kind and tries to help her cousin despite her jealousy. But her internal monologue about “showing off her happiness” when talking about Xiao Nai’s possessiveness feels genuine and a bit petty. She’s human. Yet I can’t help but feel sorry for her—she’s being set up without knowing. The author does a good job making her sympathetic even though she’s the “target” of the heroine’s mission.
The reporters suddenly backing down when they realize it's Chu Jin involved felt a bit convenient. In a real world, they might still want the headline. But since this story plays within the rules of its genre, it fits the humorous tone. It's like the author is poking fun at how these dramatic pauses always work out for the hero. It didn't break my immersion, but I saw the hand of the writer—showing how the plot bends to favor the main characters.
The pacing of the action scenes is good. They're short and to the point, focusing on the results rather than the gore. "The Captain cleaved the monster in two with a single blow" is all we need. It establishes their strength without getting bogged down. The focus is on Meru's observation of them, not on the fight itself. This keeps the story light and comedic.
Granny Liu may seem passive, but her love for Ya Ya is the anchor. The way she hugs Ya Ya and cries, or tells her not to worry, shows she’s the emotional support. Her weakness makes Ya Ya’s bravery even more poignant. I want to see more of her backstory.