When Wen Li says "Is the idiot poking his head out with a telescope upstairs your brother, your father, or your family's driver?" and the little guy looks but doesn't see – that's hilarious. Wen Li's awareness is off the charts. And Lu Wu hiding behind the pillar is comedy gold. It shows she's always in control.
I like how the author uses the chat room to naturally share lore. For example, Jean explains "Genshin Impact," which is a term from the game that not all players might know. This serves as both a reminder to fans and a intro for newcomers. Similarly, Welt's explanation of Anti-Entropy's structure helps readers understand Kiana's initial hostility. The story doesn't just dump exposition; it's woven into the character interactions. The information control by Lin Hai (blocking spoilers) also prevents the narrative from jumping ahead too fast. Smart structure.
I wish the author had developed the relationship with the girlfriend a bit more before breaking it up. The entire relationship is summarized as “we weren’t a good match” and then she dumps him. It would have been more impactful if we saw them having a happier time first, or if there was a more gradual decline in their relationship. As it is, the breakup feels less like a tragic event and more like a checkbox the plot needed to fill: "make protagonist sad and single so he can focus on powers." It wastes the emotional potential of that opening scene.