That fight with the First-Order Adept was tense. I was genuinely worried for Jiang Hao. The way he used the Bulldog as a distraction and then shot the guy? Smart. It shows he’s not just relying on the system; he actually has battle instincts from his past life.
2 The description of Feng Yaoyao's outfit – "two long legs in black stockings, paired with black high heels" – feels like a typical male-fantasy description. It's a bit eyeroll-inducing, but common in the genre. I'm judging it within the context of a web novel, so it's not a huge complaint. Just would've liked some more subtlety.
One thing I want to complain about is how casually Jiuyang takes off her shoes and lifts her uniform. I get it’s for the treatment, but it feels a bit intrusive considering they were just deskmates. Maybe a line about how he feels awkward would help.