The chapter ending with him leaping down the cliff to follow the beasts leaves a good hook. I want to see how he takes on a group fight. The anticipation is built well.
Pei Ku is a standout character. His frustration at managing an artist who wants to retire and wear facekinis is relatable. He's like a tired parent dealing with a rebellious teen. His warning about not offending the mysterious guest hints at future plotlines. I hope he stays around as a comic relief and voice of reason.
1 I have mixed feelings about Jiang Jin’s motivation to go to Liang City instead of escaping to Sizhou. On one hand, it’s super bold and I love the “I’m going to flip this table” energy. But on the other hand… five people (only one of whom can fight) versus an entire garrison city? It feels reckless. Still, gut decisions make for interesting reading, so I’m curious how she’ll pull it off.
The "Ctrl C + Ctrl V" joke is a small but perfect slice of life detail. "Don't copy the square root symbol as a factory, and don't copy one week as seven days." It shows an author who understands the mundane, specific struggles of student life and is willing to joke about it
2 I’m a little worried the story might get too domestic now that she’s settled in. The screening was exciting, the conflict with the rules was engaging, but what’s the next big hurdle? Just a series of feeding schedules and minor spats with other wet nurses? The author needs to introduce another layer of conflict soon—maybe a threat from outside the mansion, or a deeper mystery about the young master’s health.
The scene where Jian Ni and Lan Bao go down into the sewer to find the necklace and get poisoned by Ivy was a great little story snippet told in flashback. It introduces Naiya as not just a damsel but someone who gets injured protecting others. It also shows that while Jian Ni and Lan Bao are bumbling, they care enough to help others, which is sweet. The fact that the whole incident is owed to Rui Bu Si's vague advice to "not linger in the Underground Waterway" is also a great payoff. Her offhand warning almost becomes relevant. It makes her seem like a mysterious, all-knowing figure to the new friends, even though she's also clueless.
One minor issue: the premise relies on the old man not doing the simplest thing to prove his vampire nature – like showing a small trick or phasing through a wall. But I guess he's so unmotivated he can't be bothered, and the story wouldn't happen otherwise.
2 The detail about the "Cullinan" being considered "low-key" is a great touch for world-building. It perfectly establishes the levels of wealth in this story. It’s not just rich; it’s "my family owns a military company" rich. The banter between the friends about the cars ("Where's your Black Warrior?") feels like insider knowledge, making the social circle feel exclusive and authentic. It’s a small detail that goes a long way.
I like that the story doesn’t pretend the system is balanced. Ye Feng gets a game-breaking ability right away, and the narrative leans into it. This isn’t a story about struggling for scraps; it’s about a meteoric rise.
Wait so the main character just straight up borrowed fishing gear by basically guilt-tripping two guys who watched him “die?” That’s genius level pettiness and I’m here for it. Lin Bin and Lin Hu got completely outplayed and they probably don’t even realize how much. The whole moral kidnapping thing— “if you want me to be good, support me” —is such a ridiculous argument but it worked because those guys were so panicked. It shows Wu An is still smooth with words even when he’s down bad. The dialogue feels natural, not too forced, and the village rivalry dynamic is entertaining already.