BrendaTorres
The worldbuilding info dump from the God was a bit much. Three continents, multiple races, an emperor who is warlike, beastkin, spirits — it’s a lot to throw at the reader in one go. I liked that the God simplified it by comparing it to a game world, because that’s what Hinami (and the reader) can relate to. But still, I’d rather learn about the world through Hinami’s experiences than get a bullet-point lecture. The way she struggled to remember the continent names felt realistic — I had the same reaction. Hopefully the story will slow down and let us explore naturally once she’s actually in the other world. The forest setting with a safe house sounds like a good starting point.
The world-building is subtle but effective. You don't get a massive info-dump about the Blade Catchers. Instead, you learn about them through the fear people have. The neighbor got "chopped into pieces," people would rather join the army, and they haven't had a new recruit in two years. That’s more effective than a paragraph explaining the danger.
2 One thing that bugs me: if Ye Xiao can turn into K88, why didn’t he use that form during the alley fight? He just used his arm-blade and then a handgun. Is it because he didn’t know he could transform yet? The timeline says he discovered his power the next day in the hotel. So the first kill was just his latent ability manifesting without full control? That makes more sense.
