I think the part where Hinami says “I don’t care what happens to me” is very powerful. That kind of selflessness can be a strength and a flaw. Her trip to the other world might teach her to value herself. She said she wants to become an adult like the taxi driver, who was considerate. That shows she aspires to kindness. So she’s not just a martyr; she wants to grow. The God’s point system might force her to do things that require her to care about her own safety or happiness. For example, if she takes no risks, she gets no points. She might have to balance her life. That’s a good internal conflict. I’m also interested in her relationship with others: will she help people even at her own expense, or will she learn to set boundaries? That’s character development. Good start.
The language has a slight translation feel to it, with phrases like "Old Madam" and "Eldest Branch," but it works for this setting. It gives it a historical drama vibe that fits the family intrigue.
1 The protagonist’s night routine of writing down the plot is such a good detail. It’s smart and shows he’s trying to control what he can. The messy notebook with formulas on one page and a villain list on the other feels very authentic. He’s literally cramming for two battles: the Gaokao and the Zhou family drama. The fact that he specifically notes that Jiang Yulin only harassed him after Old Master Zhou suggested a marriage alliance is interesting. It gives Jiang Yulin a weird, twisted justification.
The way the story balances the past and present is smooth. I like how we get flashbacks to Shu Yue's life before marriage, her time as an educated youth, and even the first meeting with Cheng Jingchuan. It adds depth to her character without slowing down the main plot. You understand why she’s so desperate now and why she made the choices she did.