Li Mo's jealousy towards Banyue feels a bit forced. She immediately hates Banyue just because their captain shows attention? That's a common trope and it's executed without much subtlety. "The Captain was hers!" – it's a bit too direct. I'd prefer if her hostility was more nuanced, maybe based on previous team dynamics or survival fears. Right now she's just a jealous ex-fanatic.
The main character's voice feels genuine for someone who just got thrown into medieval hell. He's not some badass strategist instantly coming up with brilliant plans - he's just a guy who read too many novels and now has to deal with the consequences. His breakdown near the end where he quietly cries? That felt real. Most transmigrators would be plotting world domination by chapter 3, but this guy's just trying not to starve.