The overall design of the story leaves much to be desired, and there are certain aspects that come across as rather forced, in my opinion. One major issue is the author's inconsistent tracking of the protagonist's Progress value, which detracts significantly from the overall quality and coherence of the narrative. The protagonist's ability to amass a formidable force of soldiers, archers, and scouts just in time for the caravan's arrival raises serious questions about the logic of the plot. Given the slow recovery of Progress value (the definition of "slow" itself remains ambiguous since the author fails to quantify this), it seems implausible that the protagonist could have gathered sufficient manpower in such a short span of time—especially when the narrative lacks a clear timeline of events.
If the author neglects to keep a handle on this crucial aspect, it undermines my confidence in the overall progression of the story. It comes across as a contrived limitation placed on the protagonist, rather than a carefully crafted plot mechanism meant to enhance tension or conflict. Furthermore, while the protagonist does outline the different stages of redemption, his plans for sustaining these newly recruited soldiers remain utterly unclear. Certain soldiers demand payment while others are simply in need of basic provisions—what about ammunition? What about the upkeep of their armor? These crucial logistical details are conspicuously absent from the narrative, creating a significant gap in the story's believability.
Not long after the story begins, we see the caravan master relinquishing maids with little more than a few paragraphs of explanation on why he initially hesitated. This raises a glaring question: if he was so reluctant to part with them, why did he ultimately choose to give them up? Why not offer more supplies instead? Earlier in the chapter, he mentioned that three times the amount of supplies would hardly be a burden. His reluctance seems disingenuous, as he bemoans parting with the maids yet has adequate supplies to spare. This decision feels artificially constructed by the author, simply to provide the protagonist with two maids—an inexplicable plot device that lacks any genuine justification.
Moreover, in the same chapter, the caravan master states that he doesn't care about how much cargo is offloaded. This dissonance raises broader questions about his decision-making. At this stage in the story, why didn't he offer more goods at the outset, perhaps even attempting to conceal the maids? The portrayal of someone entrusted by the company president comes off as bewildering and lacking intelligence.
To add to these inconsistencies, we discover that the Progress value is contingent upon the technological level of the world. It is baffling to learn that the protagonist, raised as a noble, remained woefully ignorant of the fact that the technological sophistication of his new surroundings resembles that of the 1980s as compared to our time. For days after his transmigration, he failed to consider checking the redemption options for various items, which suggests a lack of foresight. This, in turn, hints at the author's haphazard introduction of elements into the story, likely stemming from a realization that, without these components, the narrative would struggle to progress coherently. Overall, these factors contribute to what can only be described as poor design from the outset, leaving readers questioning both the logic of the story and the depth of its characters.
