Mayor Wang's instant backtrack when he sees Luo Yingxue is hilarious. One minute the police are calling for SWAT, the next he's yelling "misunderstanding!" and cowering. The story doesn't explain why he's so afraid of her, which is a good hook. Is he in debt to her company? Does she have blackmail? Or is she just that powerful that he's genuinely terrified? I need more context, but for now it's just fun to watch the powerful suddenly look weak.
I wish the author had put more thought into the system's origin. Why does it exist? Who created it? Does it have a goal? The protagonist doesn't ask, so we don't know. This lack of mystery makes the system feel like a lazy plot device. Compare to novels where the system has a personality or hidden conditions. Here, it's just a cash spout. The only "special reward" so far is a gene potion. That's cool, but it feels random. I'd like a bit more system lore to add intrigue. Maybe the system is tied to a higher power or a competition among rich guys? That would add a layer of depth. As it is, the story is entirely focused on immediate gratification. I'm not against that, but I think a few hints about the bigger picture would improve the narrative. Maybe later chapters will reveal more. For now, it's a straightforward money-printing machine.
The action scenes, like the hunting and the confrontation with the old beggar, are choreographed clearly. During the deer hunt, we see the formation, the signal, the release of arrows, and the results: three deer down immediately. Later, when they surround the beggar, the sequence is clear — Li Gouzi goes first with the spear, the others follow, the dogs bark. The story doesn't try to be flashy; it just tells you what happens step by step. This clarity makes it easy to visualize the scenes without confusion. It also fits the characters, who are practical people doing practical work. There's no overdramatization, just "this happened, then this." I find this straightforward action style more immersive than overdescribed sword fights.
I really like the visual descriptions of the "Moonlit Tower" where the inner sect trials happen. The architecture of the floating glass floors and moonstone pillars sounds breathtaking. The author has a real talent for making imaginary locations feel vivid and memorable.
The ending of the excerpt — with Tobirama pouring reagent into a waste pit and commenting that it’s not for experiments — is cryptic. What is he actually doing? Could it be related to Hashirama’s cells? That cliffhanger makes me want to read the next chapter immediately.