30. Overall, I am enjoying the "I’m going to leave home and become a martial arts master" fantasy. It’s pure escapist fiction. The prose is simple, the characters are archetypes, and the plot jumps are huge, but the heart is in the right place. You want the angry kid to get his redemption and show his dad what he’s made of. The emotional core is strong, even if the delivery is messy. I’m probably going to keep reading just to see if he ever gets revenge on that Zhang Shuai kid.
The whole adoptive family situation is so frustrating to read. Liu Ying and Wen Dashan are the absolute worst, treating her like a tool and expecting her to just hand over awakening rewards and drag her brother along. The part where they talk about getting a gene potion for the brother like it’s no big deal made me laugh out loud, it’s so delusional. I was genuinely angry for Wu Sisi, but also relieved she’s not passive.
The scenes where the old man reluctantly goes along with the saint's plans, like agreeing that the familiar is his granddaughter, show his softer side. He could easily blast her out of the castle but he chooses to play along. That says a lot about his current state.
I really appreciate how the author doesn’t make Jiang Nan super confident or perfect. When she’s in the live stream and “Suspiciousness Ing” starts attacking her, she literally thinks about ending the broadcast to run away. That’s so human. She’s not one of those strong female leads who never doubt themselves; she’s scared and insecure, and that makes her victories feel earned. The fact that she was ready to give up and go work in a factory tightening screws shows how real her desperation is.
I have to admit, the pacing feels a bit rushed in some parts. They go from the coffee shop to the hospital to the Qin villa to the bus in what feels like twenty minutes. I would've liked a breather scene where Qin Bai just… sits with his thoughts more. But then again, the fast pace keeps you turning pages. It's a trade-off.
The humor is a strong suit. Lines like “Women with long necks are indeed more adorable” or “I'm not a doctor, I'm just a struggling Author” perfectly capture the MC's voice. The contrast between his polite words and violent actions is consistently funny.
Overall, the excerpt does a great job of establishing the world, the conflict, and the characters quickly. By the time I finished reading, I wanted to know what happens next. That's a good sign for a story's hook.